Talk:Task Force Serpent
First, this page desperately needs some grammatical clean up. I ran out of steam halfway through a preliminary overhaul. Second, I had a question about the claimed route taken by TFS (probably a result of the grammar):
"Task Force Serpent went along a route that brought them near the Outworld Alliance. They went on with a route, parallel to those commonly used by the clans."
Did TFS start way out by the OA? If so, how/when did TFS end up on the path parallel to the common Clan route to the Inner Sphere? That's way over toward the Lyran/Kuritan/FRR space from the OA.
Finally, is this entry really still a stub? --Cray 04:20, 11 February 2009 (PST)
- "Serpent's route would take them through the Federated Commonwealth and the Outworlds Alliance...." From Twilight of the Clans, pg. 9. --Scaletail 17:41, 11 February 2009 (PST)
- Sorry about the grammar, but english is not my mother tongue. I know, some of my sentences sound clumsy. --Detlef 03:13, 12 February 2009 (PST)
- No need to apologize. You provided a great deal of good information and really filled out the page. --Cray 04:02, 12 February 2009 (PST)